32465 R.D 10
Las Animas, CO 81054
26th October, 2010
Las Animas, CO 81054
26th October, 2010
Carl Lindauer
300 Grove Ave.
Las Animas, CO 81054
300 Grove Ave.
Las Animas, CO 81054
Dear Mr. Carl Lindauer
Being a student at Las Animas High School, I recognize the pros and cons of our school system and facilities. You know as well as I do that here at Las Animas, we take our athletics very seriously, and are willing to do whatever it takes in order to be more successful at sports. So if the weight lifting classes were offered, I would be very appreciative.
Its been proven that simple strength building exercises (such as weight lifting) decreases the number of serious injuries in all sports. Some injuries that can be avoided are ACL tears, muscle strains and muscles tears. Also, if you are doing your proper stretches after weightlifting, you will notice your game improving as you become bigger, faster, and stronger. When you gain more muscle, your speed will increase for track, your vertical will increase in basketball, your strength will enable you to tackle harder and recover faster. But these are not the only benefits of weight lifting.
I know that the school’s budget for hiring new teachers is very low at this point in time, but if a couple of the physical education classes were combined, then the P.E teacher could offer an hour or two of weight lifting classes. Also if more classes were offered, there would be a greater variety of electives for students to choose from. If more electives were available, then other classes would have a smaller number of students, allowing teachers to teach more effectively.
I want the best for our athletes here at Las Animas, but with a few modifications, our sports programs will see a dramatic effect in the right direction.
Its been proven that simple strength building exercises (such as weight lifting) decreases the number of serious injuries in all sports. Some injuries that can be avoided are ACL tears, muscle strains and muscles tears. Also, if you are doing your proper stretches after weightlifting, you will notice your game improving as you become bigger, faster, and stronger. When you gain more muscle, your speed will increase for track, your vertical will increase in basketball, your strength will enable you to tackle harder and recover faster. But these are not the only benefits of weight lifting.
I know that the school’s budget for hiring new teachers is very low at this point in time, but if a couple of the physical education classes were combined, then the P.E teacher could offer an hour or two of weight lifting classes. Also if more classes were offered, there would be a greater variety of electives for students to choose from. If more electives were available, then other classes would have a smaller number of students, allowing teachers to teach more effectively.
I want the best for our athletes here at Las Animas, but with a few modifications, our sports programs will see a dramatic effect in the right direction.
Sincerely,
Taylor:
ReplyDeletemake sure you only have on space between your adresses and the dear so and so. It sounds good however if it was up to me i would include more about the opportunities that is gives us.
opportunties such as...? being bigger faster stronger?
ReplyDeleteTaylor,
ReplyDeleteA good start. Some parts of this to consider are if the PE programs are combined, who will be in charge of those? Mr. Lindauer, your audience is the one that will be taking the blow on that one. How can you convince him that this is a good idea. He is the athletic director, but he is also a teacher, and a human being, so how do we make this fair for him?
Also, in the introduction, you don't need "Mr. Carl Lindauer." "Mr. Lindauer" will be just fine.
Lastly, there needs to be a concluding paragraph where you restate your argument, summarize main ideas, and thank your audience for their time.
A good start, and I can't wait to read the final!
Mr. Armstrong
thanks mr armstrong!
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